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Winter's Rasp by ~braceletsofsmoke:iconbraceletsofsmoke:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Emotional




Cold winter days
Long dark nights

Fires crackle in the grates
Yet still we are apart

Six feet doesn’t seem that far
Yet an eternity is wasted on avoiding the pain

Missing you is like my death
Crying out, I am not saved
Breath is escaping, none put back

Empty arms, blank stares
Your caress would warm me, if only
The days were longer, the sun brighter

Darkness encloses us
Yet I can still see your light
©2004-2009 ~braceletsofsmoke
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Author's Comments

....just came into my head - rather random really. funny what bordem can do to you.

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~Kiwi070620 Jan 26, 2004, 2:03:01 PM
This is great...I feel the same way missing my sweetheart. I wish he was in my arms right now....I love this so much...great job.
:iconbadblokebob:
~badblokebob Jan 26, 2004, 2:19:59 PM
[Posh English Voice]I shall comment on this in the form of a numbered list:

1) Very cool title.
2) Very cool poem.
3) I like the imagery. The cold and dark are both excellent ideas to relate to the feelings evoked.
4) The initial meaning appears obvious, yet there are still personal interpretations to be made and things to be thought about.

All in all, I found it to be a rather enjoyable experience. Good job old chum.[/PEV]

Hehe :) :+fav:

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~devilishlycrazy Jan 27, 2004, 1:58:16 PM
this is great, the imagery comes across well & easily, it's a really sweet piece, nice work :)

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normal people worry me :O_o:
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~discern Jan 27, 2004, 3:57:59 PM
quite so.

rather calming, if only. the fith stanza is the grasp that i imagined through the piece.

wondering.

:thumbsup:

--
Don't expect it to make sence.
It already has it.
:iconalwayzdazd:
~alwayzdazd Jan 28, 2004, 10:54:57 AM
i like...and yes..boredom can do weird things to ya :lick:

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Am I the star beneath the stairs?

Am I a ghost upon the stage?

Am I your anything?


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~rubenesque Jan 28, 2004, 1:15:45 PM
Very Very beautiful. :winner:

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~emotionlessangel Jan 30, 2004, 1:53:32 PM
jolly good! =D i love it!

--
this poison's my intoxication
i broke the needle off in my skin
picked the scab
and picked the bleeding
and assumed that it was all in vain..
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~Rosebud1313 Jun 16, 2004, 2:18:25 AM
:aww: I love this poem! It's so tender...

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Love,
Sandy:rose:
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